Gossip not only affects the teachers at the school but it can also affect the students and how they learn. Teachers spread rumors and gossip faster than students do. They perceive it as just “office talk” but in reality they are spreading sometimes barbarous gossip about other teachers in the building. This can affect the students learning because teachers might not want to work with another colleague because of gossip said about that person or because that person spread gossip about you. If teachers keep acting like this students won't get the same privileges that they could have gotten because the teachers can’t work together.
This is a very good article that I think all teachers should read. It explains the different types of gossip how each kind can affect teachers and schools in different ways and it also explains the steps you can take to keep your workplace gossip to a minimum.
"This can affect the students learning because teachers might not want to work with another colleague because of gossip said about that person or because that person spread gossip about you." reword this its a bit confusing
i agree with Sean that you used "because" and other words in that sentence that don't really make sense. Maybe also at the beginning you can state that gossip happens with teachers, and then say "not only does it affect teacher, but also students"
In the third sentance take out the word "it" and replace it with a noun as the sentence confuses the reader by giving a pronoun 3 different options for the sentence.
hey sorry about that, I accidentilly deleated my post thinking it was a comment on another blog here is my article Farley, Sally D. "Is Gossip Power?" Wiley Online Library, 1 June 2011. Web. 24 Nov.2014 Though many have done research on the topic of gossip, there has been little research on how people feel about those who gossip. In a series of studies, Sally Farley has found information on this topic. She found that when people had gossiped more, more people disliked them. If a person gossiped less, fewer people disliked the person. In comparison, the results show that people who gossip are less liked and shown to have less power in the popular world. In the survey, people were asked to do a few things and then they would be asked questions about how they felt about a person who gossiped either good, or bad. Depending on the first answer, the questions moved on for a deeper understanding of the likeability of the person. I recommend the article with those of a higher reading level as it is at least of a college level. The article is most-likely directed at those who wish to learn about the consequences of gossip. As well, the reader should have a basic background in gossip. The article is extremely interesting but rather dense. It is very formal. There is no bias and the facts are very straight cut.
When you say "She found that when people had gossiped more, more people disliked them. If a person gossiped less, fewer people disliked the person." I had to do a double take because it was grammatically correct but worded a little weird.
The usage of Drones by paparazzi has been a rumor spreading around and has frightened many people but also intrigued others. This rumor going around shows how it spreads and people keep finding ways to make themselves believe its true even though it may not be. The rumor about the drones may not be true there are many plausible ways it could be. The drone is shown to be wanted by many of the paparazzi, and they all say how useful it would be. Alot of the celebrities try to prepare for this and prevent the pictures.This writing was very interesting and made good points but it could have given more detail on the gossip about the drones more. This writing piece would mainly be aimed towards people looking to research the theory on the drones. Also anyone interested in spread of rumors and how they are still kept alive when proven wrong.
When you say " The rumor about the drones may not be true there are many plausible ways it could be." I feel like that's kind of a confusing sentence and you should maybe reread it. Also, split "alot" into two words.
The sentence where you said " the rumor about the drowns may not be true there are many..." To me where you went from true and there i think maybe you should put a word because it got me a little confused. i might have just read it to fast tho
i think "This rumor going around shows how it spreads and people keep finding ways to make themselves believe its true even though it may not be" is a run-on sentance
In the first sentace or the next give an example of a "drone". Are they like small helicopters or half size planes. What can they do? (beyond taking pictures....)
Kurland, Nancy B. "Passing the Word: Toward a Model of Gossip and Power in the Workplace." The Academy of Management Review 25.2 (2000): 428-38. CareerStoneGroup. CareerStoneGroup. Web. 24 Nov. 2014.
To distinguish if what people are talking about is gossip or just a normal conversation, decide whether it would hurt someone’s feelings or not. If the answer is ¨Yes,¨ then what is being conversed is gossip. When people gossip at work, they lose trust in each other which causes them to second guess one another. This breaks down teamwork leading to less productivity around the office. The best way to try and stop gossip around work is to ignore it as much as possible. This article is an instructional document on the effects of gossip about how to prevent it around the workplace. It has a step by step guide, intended for office workers, on what to do if gossip occurs. The reader would be interested in the step-by-step solution on how prevent gossip. It is not a biased document, but does not use a very formal style of writing.
First sentence doesn't flow, please rephrase. I would make the last sentence into two as they dont really compare or contrast from one another. They are different complete thoughts.
In school, gossip spreads like wildfire and students are tempted to keep spreading the chain of someone else’s troubles. It’s a guilty pleasure that will probably not be stopped but it should be acknowledge. Gossip can easily get out of control. People could add in untrue information or not completely understand the true story. When having a temptation to engage in the juicy stories about someone at school, just don’t do it. Gossip and rumors are closely related and are a force not to be reckoned with. They aren’t needed to take part in the school day and should simply be avoided. Set a good example, actions speak louder than words. In this case, staying away from these kind of temptations are for the greater good and can persuade other students not to engage. Why take the chance of the damaging effects of punishment. School is meant to be a safe environment for everyone and no one should worry about what fellow students say about them behind their back. All in all, gossip is ugly and the best things in life are the simple things, unlike the forsaken nightmare known as gossip.
you used a lot of cliches like "spreads like a wildfire", "a force not to be reckoned with", or "actions speak louder than words" so maybe find a better way to say it
Tierney, John. "Can You Believe How Mean Office Gossip Can Be?" The New York Times. The New York Times, 02 Nov. 2009. Web. 20 Nov. 2014.
This article compares workplace gossip to middle school gossip. The author explains the two schools of gossip and their theories. However, the author goes further by detailing the findings of a two-year study where a researcher went undercover to actively study workplace gossip. His findings offer information on direct and indirect gossip and the tactics used by those who stop the gossip. The strength of this article comes from the real-life gossip study and the links provided for additional information. It would be very helpful to those researching the many facets of gossip and its effects.
People gossip even though they know it’s bad and that there is consequences. Schools need to take a look at how much gossip is involved with in the school. People are always going to want to gossip and might not even know that it is considered gossip, but it leads uncertainties. If people paid more attention to realize what is considered gossip, they can stop it from spreading. People should not listen to the gossip in the first place. Not only does gossip happen with the kids but also in the teachers and faculty. Schools should be a safe, calm place, where students and teachers can be able to face issues. In schools, people need to have communication and they need to try to stop rumors before they spread. Schools need to have plans for if gossip does happen and keep it under control , because a lot of bad things can come out of it.
This article would be good for people looking into this subject and into gossip. It did not have any bias and did a good job of explaining how gossip is bad, and how it affects schools. It also gave good ways to prevent gossip and how to deal with it in these schools.
In the first sentence, you should use ¨are consequences¨ instead of ¨is consequences.¨ Also, the middle of the summary seems a bit choppy, but overall great job.
KOUL, SCAACHI. "Office Gossip." Canadian Business 87.10 (2014): 28. Academic Search Elite. Web. 25 Nov. 2014.
According to this article, gossip occurs not only in the young adolescent stage, but in adult areas such as the workplace. The most common type would be prosocial gossip. It is where gossip is about people and supposedly exists to help social interactions. This type of gossip is split into two types. The first type is what is wanted. It should be encouraged so human connections can be made. (the other type is missing) It also says that there is nothing like a common office enemy. It can save you from embarrassing yourself. Along with this, it says that office gossip like other types of social interaction, have rules that apply in both cases. Some of these are never say something that you would not want others to hear, do not spread harmful rumors that don’t have proof, and use gossip to see weaknesses that can be improved. Nothing is wrong with a little bit of office gossip, as long as it does not actually hurt someone.
Overall, this article is missing a few things. It does not clearly state the second kind of prosocial gossip, nor does it have a clear topic. The topic constantly shifts and adds more ideas. The audience would be directed towards people entering the work stage of life. A big weakness would be some terms used that can be seen as slang or street talk. A strength would be that it does give an insight into what happens in the office.
Great job on the analysis, but this sentence confused me maybe reword it. "The first type is what is wanted. It should be encouraged so human connections can be made."
"Bullying under Attack." The Guardian.com. Grrlscientist, 23 Sept. 2013. Web. 24 Nov. 2014.
The article Bullying Under Attack is a book that gives teens all over the world a voice to share their bullying story. There are over 80 excerpts from adolescents that are willing to share how and why they were being bullied, and what they did to overcome it. This article also teaches teens all different types of bullying that occurs, and how or what you can do to prevent it from effecting you. Essays, poetry, open letters, photography, and drawing are used in this book, mostly representing the individual stories of the people who experienced it themselves.
This book does have some basis, because against bullying, and the stories of the teens stand towards anti-bullying and that people should not be put down for being themselves. The intended audience in the article are teens, and they get to connect with the other adolescents that wrote their story. Although there may be some bias, the point that bullying should not happen and people should not be put down for being themselves is portrayed very well in this story.
Yes Claire is right, try not to list in the summary. Also try not to use "you" like when you said "prevent it from effecting you" maybe make it general and say prevent from effecting people or others.
maybe instead of saying so much about the specific parts that are biased just say that it is biased and instead list some special points of interest, and strengths of the article
West, Emily. "Bullying, Gossip, Lack of Respect Often Causes of Teen Suicide." Aberdeen American News. N.p., 06 Jan. 2011. Web. 23 Nov. 2014.
Suicide rates among students at high schools and universities are rapidly increasing and it is mostly due to gossiping and bullying. Social media websites are a big source that are connected to a lot of the suicide killings. This happens because it gives one the chance to confront another person without having to see the person physically so basically anybody can bully over the internet no matter how strong or weak you are in reality. But bullying is not the only reason for so many suicides sometimes teens are in a dark place and think they have had enough and take their own life. whether it is on the playground, at school or even, over social media bullying happens everywhere at every age. The article is a gathering of different quotes from police and the principle from a teens school. The teen they are talking about committed suicide and they believe it had to do with bullying that took place on social media.
Adding to dayna's comment. Bullying is not a form of gossip as gossip is behind a person's back but bullying is in the victam's face. This article may be void
Yee, Vivian. "On Staten Island, Relentless Bullying Is Blamed for a Teenage Girl’s Suicide." The New York Times. The New York Times, 25 Oct. 2012. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
In this article they talk about how Felicia Garcia committed suicide do to gossip from the football team. Felicia threw herself in front of a train to get it over with because the football team had been spreading gossip about her that was not true.The police were investigating her death for a long time. But in the end police officers were not positive that anyone would get in trouble for what happened. Many people were hurt by the fact that she killed herself, so the article also makes people realise that its not only yourself that gets hurt if you try to kill yourself it is also the people around you and who care about you.
This article is a good article if you are wanting to read about someone who took her own life because of gossip and because of bullying. This article has no bias and it speaks the truth about what happened. It has really good quality of word choice and it goes through a lot of things that happen so you get the gist of everything.
Youre writing hee is not formal. Fix it by taking out things like "to get it over with" and "threw herself". Make sure to stay to the author's views rather than any of your own.
Gossip and Reputations Lezard, Nicholas. "It’S One Thing To Have A Reputation, But Quite Another To Have One That Is So Undeserved." New Statesman 143.5231 (2014): 88-89. Literary Reference Center. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
In this article the author is explaining how gossip has become a prominent source of entertainment, how it can affect your social status, and how it negatively impact individuals reputations. The author explains how on multiple occasions people close to him had utilized gossip in a hurtful way to create false accusations about his personal life. For example, the authors friends had created the rumor that he drinks too much even though the author stated that he does not. This is hurtful to him because it questions his good reputation that he has worked hard on. The author depicts how his friends immediately categorized him as a bad influence because of second hand information that gossip had manipulated.
This article is better for the more advanced reader but anyone should be able to manage without much trouble. Some strengths and weaknesses that the reader can observe are that the article is a great example of how gossip can ruin a persons reputation but the article at times can be a bit hard to follow.
Nickolai Diepholz Fackler, Maria Francesca. "“I'll Google It”: Gossip, Queer Intimacies, and the Internet1." Modern Drama 53.3 (2010): 390-409. Web.
Some ways are for gossip and how it relates to the internet and social media are that It is spread around the internet and thats a form of gossip. Some celebrities have articles on the internet and if they're divorced and pregnant and some stuff like that. For example from the journal article gossip it is about how gossip spreads around the internet and the girl karam tells how the new technology shows how gossip and how information spreads around the internet very fast and it gets changed and people make stuff up along the way. She also states that the chain of all the different technology spreads all the way and changes through phones to computers to tablets. Gossip is spread and taught through the way people tell and think and change things through their mind and people change things through how they think. Pretty much information that is changed over time and flipped from its original way is gossip. The way it is shared is through social midia like facebook and other things like that.
Make sure you are not listening what kind of things are on line for celebrities. And also saying some stuff like that is kinda informal make sure you stay in formal voice.
Devonte Patriquin Levin, Dan. "Weaning Teenagers Off Gossip, for One Hour at a Time."Weaning Teenagers Off Gossip, for One Hour at a Time (2008): n. pag. Web.
This article seems to piece together the fact that gossip can affect teenagers and the older group in new ways. The interesting piece of this is the fact that people never realize the larger effect on people. However, as it travels, gossip becomes contorted and the truth becomes lies or worse. In the end, gossip usually ends up hurting someone or multiple people in one fell swoop. Gossip itself takes multiple effects, and this pieces them together well. As they all seem to connect back to one source. The article also discusses what people are doing to fight against gossip, such as forming large groups and working together. Also, a large factor is how people are taking it. Many of them are working together and realizing what gossip does. But, that doesn't change the fact that gossip may always exist, no matter how far it goes against someones wishes.
Wiley, John. "Is Gossip Power? The Inverse Relationship Between Gossip, Power And, Likabality." Ebsco. N.p., 1 June 2011. Web. 23 Nov. 2014. Gossip can affect how much power people have in social groups, How liked they are and how trustworthy they are. People who gossip about someone else negatively share a stronger a social bond. People who gossip more frequently have higher social status than with people who dont gossip as often. People who gossip negatively about other people are deemed untrustworthy. People gossip with in a group to enhance their self esteem. Negative gossipers are likes less than positive gossipers. Some distinctive features about this article is that it is a more challenging read that requires most readers to closely read it. This article is not a short or lengthy article. The intended audience are scholars and researchers. Some strengths about this article is that it goes in depth into every cause and effect they have. Some weaknesses of this article are that it has areas with data and abbreviated tests that make you stop and reread it. There was no bias.
Anderson, Bill. "Less Gossip, Better Schools." Education Digest 61.4 (1995): 19. Academic Search Elite. Web. 24 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteGossip not only affects the teachers at the school but it can also affect the students and how they learn. Teachers spread rumors and gossip faster than students do. They perceive it as just “office talk” but in reality they are spreading sometimes barbarous gossip about other teachers in the building. This can affect the students learning because teachers might not want to work with another colleague because of gossip said about that person or because that person spread gossip about you. If teachers keep acting like this students won't get the same privileges that they could have gotten because the teachers can’t work together.
This is a very good article that I think all teachers should read. It explains the different types of gossip how each kind can affect teachers and schools in different ways and it also explains the steps you can take to keep your workplace gossip to a minimum.
In your analysis, do not use words like "I"
DeleteIf I where you i would not put it teachers might not want to work because it sounds like an opinion because you said might and not they will.
Delete"This can affect the students learning because teachers might not want to work with another colleague because of gossip said about that person or because that person spread gossip about you." reword this its a bit confusing
Deletei agree with Sean that you used "because" and other words in that sentence that don't really make sense. Maybe also at the beginning you can state that gossip happens with teachers, and then say "not only does it affect teacher, but also students"
Deleteok the second part of my comment didn't make any sense so just ignore it
DeleteIn the last sentence, don't say "you"
Deletedoes all "Office talk" offend fellow teacher. I would specify what it is they are talking about.
Deletekeep your summary and analysis formal so do not use i or you also keep your personal opinions out
DeleteNice job Bella! Just try to fix some of your sentences some of them don't quite work. And what others have said too!
DeleteTry not to use your own opinion in your analysis. Do not use ¨I think¨ because it expresses your own opinion.
DeleteIn the third sentance take out the word "it" and replace it with a noun as the sentence confuses the reader by giving a pronoun 3 different options for the sentence.
DeleteThe main idea sentence could have been a little more complex.
Deleteyoure analisis has to be more detailed
Deletemore in the analysis, and try not to put in personal opinions
Deleteyou should try to add more analysis
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ReplyDeleteIn your analysis, do not use words like "I" and "you".
DeleteMake sure you stay in formal voice in you analysis
DeleteThere are a lot of comma splices in this
Deletethey analysis sounds kind of list-y. especially the last few sentances
DeleteAs well, the reader should have a basic background in gossip. --- I think you should rephrase this so "as well" is at the end of the sentence.
DeleteDon's start of with talk about other articles stay with yours.
Deletemake sure you read it out loud there a little awkwardness in the summary
DeleteTry to keep the listing out and make one general category. But great job!
DeleteThe analysis section seems choppy; like you are moving from one topic to the next. Also try to use more formal writing.
Deletehey sorry about that, I accidentilly deleated my post thinking it was a comment on another blog
Deletehere is my article
Farley, Sally D. "Is Gossip Power?" Wiley Online Library, 1 June 2011. Web. 24 Nov.2014
Though many have done research on the topic of gossip, there has been little research on how people feel about those who gossip. In a series of studies, Sally Farley has found information on this topic. She found that when people had gossiped more, more people disliked them. If a person gossiped less, fewer people disliked the person. In comparison, the results show that people who gossip are less liked and shown to have less power in the popular world. In the survey, people were asked to do a few things and then they would be asked questions about how they felt about a person who gossiped either good, or bad. Depending on the first answer, the questions moved on for a deeper understanding of the likeability of the person.
I recommend the article with those of a higher reading level as it is at least of a college level. The article is most-likely directed at those who wish to learn about the consequences of gossip. As well, the reader should have a basic background in gossip. The article is extremely interesting but rather dense. It is very formal. There is no bias and the facts are very straight cut.
When you say "She found that when people had gossiped more, more people disliked them. If a person gossiped less, fewer people disliked the person." I had to do a double take because it was grammatically correct but worded a little weird.
Deleteneed more evidence on the article
DeleteDickson, Caitlin. "Paparazzi With Drones." Newsweek 160.24 (2012): 10-12. Academic Search Elite. Web. 23 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteThe usage of Drones by paparazzi has been a rumor spreading around and has frightened many people but also intrigued others. This rumor going around shows how it spreads and people keep finding ways to make themselves believe its true even though it may not be. The rumor about the drones may not be true there are many plausible ways it could be. The drone is shown to be wanted by many of the paparazzi, and they all say how useful it would be. Alot of the celebrities try to prepare for this and prevent the pictures.This writing was very interesting and made good points but it could have given more detail on the gossip about the drones more. This writing piece would mainly be aimed towards people looking to research the theory on the drones. Also anyone interested in spread of rumors and how they are still kept alive when proven wrong.
When you say " The rumor about the drones may not be true there are many plausible ways it could be." I feel like that's kind of a confusing sentence and you should maybe reread it. Also, split "alot" into two words.
DeleteThe sentence where you said " the rumor about the drowns may not be true there are many..." To me where you went from true and there i think maybe you should put a word because it got me a little confused. i might have just read it to fast tho
Deletei think "This rumor going around shows how it spreads and people keep finding ways to make themselves believe its true even though it may not be" is a run-on sentance
Delete"The rumor about the drones may not be true there are many plausible ways it could be." I think you might need a comma in this sentence
Deletethe second sentence might be a run on
Deletemake the rumor about drones a little more clear
DeleteI'm not sure what drones are... maybe elaborate but just a little! Overall great job Sean
DeleteMake sure that, in the analysis, you indicate if there are any biases or not.
DeleteIn the first sentace or the next give an example of a "drone". Are they like small helicopters or half size planes. What can they do? (beyond taking pictures....)
DeleteTheres a run on sentense and explain what drones are but swaggy job
Deletestay true to your topic, and clarify about drones, otherwise good job
Deleteyou should repeat the rumors of the drones less
DeleteKurland, Nancy B. "Passing the Word: Toward a Model of Gossip and Power in the Workplace." The Academy of Management Review 25.2 (2000): 428-38. CareerStoneGroup. CareerStoneGroup. Web. 24 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteTo distinguish if what people are talking about is gossip or just a normal conversation, decide whether it would hurt someone’s feelings or not. If the answer is ¨Yes,¨ then what is being conversed is gossip. When people gossip at work, they lose trust in each other which causes them to second guess one another. This breaks down teamwork leading to less productivity around the office. The best way to try and stop gossip around work is to ignore it as much as possible. This article is an instructional document on the effects of gossip about how to prevent it around the workplace. It has a step by step guide, intended for office workers, on what to do if gossip occurs. The reader would be interested in the step-by-step solution on how prevent gossip. It is not a biased document, but does not use a very formal style of writing.
This summery could maybe be a little bit longer.
DeleteI agree with Claire. also try to explain who the intended audience is.
DeleteI agree with Claire that it could be longer, but maybe also make sure to distinctively include the main idea statement
DeleteTry not to use your opinions when talking about the best way to try and stop gossip
DeleteTell us who the audience should be
Deleteit seems like i am reading the middle of a paragraph maybe phrase your first sentence a little differently
DeleteI agree with the others, try to make your summary a bit longer but overall great job!
DeleteFirst sentence doesn't flow, please rephrase. I would make the last sentence into two as they dont really compare or contrast from one another. They are different complete thoughts.
DeleteThat first sentence is a little awkward. Everything else was good!
DeleteThe First sentence was little confusing to me maybe make it more clear but good for everything else.
DeleteMaybe talk about the audience more but good job Finn
Deletetry to improve summary, but otherwise, nice job
DeleteAnderson, Bill. "Less Gossip, Better Schools." Education Digest 61.4 (1995): 19. Academic Search Elite. Web. 24 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteIn school, gossip spreads like wildfire and students are tempted to keep spreading the chain of someone else’s troubles. It’s a guilty pleasure that will probably not be stopped but it should be acknowledge. Gossip can easily get out of control. People could add in untrue information or not completely understand the true story. When having a temptation to engage in the juicy stories about someone at school, just don’t do it. Gossip and rumors are closely related and are a force not to be reckoned with. They aren’t needed to take part in the school day and should simply be avoided. Set a good example, actions speak louder than words. In this case, staying away from these kind of temptations are for the greater good and can persuade other students not to engage. Why take the chance of the damaging effects of punishment. School is meant to be a safe environment for everyone and no one should worry about what fellow students say about them behind their back. All in all, gossip is ugly and the best things in life are the simple things, unlike the forsaken nightmare known as gossip.
"In school gossip spreads like wildfire" that is a cliche maybe look for another way to word that.
DeleteTo me a couple sentences sounded a little choppy but i could be wrong maybe just re read it other then that and what Sean said it was good.
Deleteyou used a lot of cliches like "spreads like a wildfire", "a force not to be reckoned with", or "actions speak louder than words" so maybe find a better way to say it
Delete"force not to be reckoned with" Try not to use cliches
DeleteI would shorten it a little but other that that it was great.
Deletemake sure to keep it formal so get rid of contractions
DeleteI don't think there is much of an analysis in the annotation. Try to add the strengths and weaknesses of the article, but the summary was very good.
Deleteadding to finn, in the annotation, add the intended audience and give a summary of the bias or lack there of.
DeleteGossip can easily get out of control. This sentence feels a little wonky.
DeleteThe second sentense might have to be changed but the rest is swagger
DeleteI would try to add more of an anyalis, maybe say if there was any bias.
DeleteTierney, John. "Can You Believe How Mean Office Gossip Can Be?" The New York Times. The New York Times, 02 Nov. 2009. Web. 20 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteThis article compares workplace gossip to middle school gossip. The author explains the two schools of gossip and their theories. However, the author goes further by detailing the findings of a two-year study where a researcher went undercover to actively study workplace gossip. His findings offer information on direct and indirect gossip and the tactics used by those who stop the gossip. The strength of this article comes from the real-life gossip study and the links provided for additional information. It would be very helpful to those researching the many facets of gossip and its effects.
Make sure to keep the "spirit" of the authors original artical
DeleteIm just thinking that maybe your summery should be a little longer and also make sure you are explaining a little more what the article is about.
DeleteI think your analysis and summary could be a bit longer. Maybe add who the intended audience is.
Deleteyou could make both the summary and analysis longer and also make it clearer where the summary ends and analysis starts
DeleteTry not to focus so much on the details, and maybe make it a bit longer
DeleteMaybe say the authors name rather than "his". Other than that great job!
Deletewho is the intended audience?
DeleteTry to get into a bit more detail in the summary. You could add what the schools' theories were.
DeleteAny bias?? (or nah..) add the two schools of thought generally.
DeleteTry to find causes and effects.
Could be a little longer
DeleteMake the analysis longer but the rest is swaggie.
Deletecould be longer, also who is the intended audience? otherwise good work.
DeleteAnderson, Bill. "Less Gossip, Better Schools." Education Digest 61.4 (1995): 19. Teacher Reference Center. Web. 24 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeletePeople gossip even though they know it’s bad and that there is consequences. Schools need to take a look at how much gossip is involved with in the school. People are always going to want to gossip and might not even know that it is considered gossip, but it leads uncertainties. If people paid more attention to realize what is considered gossip, they can stop it from spreading. People should not listen to the gossip in the first place. Not only does gossip happen with the kids but also in the teachers and faculty. Schools should be a safe, calm place, where students and teachers can be able to face issues. In schools, people need to have communication and they need to try to stop rumors before they spread. Schools need to have plans for if gossip does happen and keep it under control , because a lot of bad things can come out of it.
This article would be good for people looking into this subject and into gossip. It did not have any bias and did a good job of explaining how gossip is bad, and how it affects schools. It also gave good ways to prevent gossip and how to deal with it in these schools.
Saying "people should not listen to gossip in the first place" could be thought of as your ow opinion so just be careful for that.
DeleteYour summary and analysis seem good except for what Claire said, but I do think you should add to the analysis a bit more.
Deletei agree with Claire that you used a lot of personal opinions or suggestions
DeleteThe first sentence seems a bit rushed like the reader already knew what you were talking about
DeleteI agree with Sean,your analysis is good but maybe add some more. Good job!
Deletetry not to put your personal opinion in
DeleteIn the first sentence, you should use ¨are consequences¨ instead of ¨is consequences.¨ Also, the middle of the summary seems a bit choppy, but overall great job.
DeleteWith in should be within
Delete"people should not listen to gossip in the first place" sounds like a personal opinion, a bit of rewording a fix that. Otherwise good job.
DeleteKOUL, SCAACHI. "Office Gossip." Canadian Business 87.10 (2014): 28. Academic Search Elite. Web. 25 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteAccording to this article, gossip occurs not only in the young adolescent stage, but in adult areas such as the workplace. The most common type would be prosocial gossip. It is where gossip is about people and supposedly exists to help social interactions. This type of gossip is split into two types. The first type is what is wanted. It should be encouraged so human connections can be made. (the other type is missing) It also says that there is nothing like a common office enemy. It can save you from embarrassing yourself. Along with this, it says that office gossip like other types of social interaction, have rules that apply in both cases. Some of these are never say something that you would not want others to hear, do not spread harmful rumors that don’t have proof, and use gossip to see weaknesses that can be improved. Nothing is wrong with a little bit of office gossip, as long as it does not actually hurt someone.
Overall, this article is missing a few things. It does not clearly state the second kind of prosocial gossip, nor does it have a clear topic. The topic constantly shifts and adds more ideas. The audience would be directed towards people entering the work stage of life. A big weakness would be some terms used that can be seen as slang or street talk. A strength would be that it does give an insight into what happens in the office.
Make sure you dont say "it also says" because you are summerizing and not taking things from the text
DeleteGreat job on the analysis, but this sentence confused me maybe reword it.
Delete"The first type is what is wanted. It should be encouraged so human connections can be made."
you forgot a few commas
DeleteGreat job overall! But in some parts it seemed like you were listing. Other than that it was good!
Deletei am confused...gossip is used to get people socialized in the work place?
DeleteThe summary was very detailed and flowed well, but in the analysis you should add if there were any biases in the article.
DeleteYou might not want to focus so much on the details
DeleteWAY TOO LONG 247 words. Cut it down and make sure to include only the bones.
DeleteSeems like your listing at times.
Deletethe sentense number 3 is too big make it smaller but the rest is swagger.
DeleteI would try to condense this a little bit and try to lesson the lists. But other then that I feel like it flows very nicely.
Delete"Bullying under Attack." The Guardian.com. Grrlscientist, 23 Sept. 2013. Web. 24 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteThe article Bullying Under Attack is a book that gives teens all over the world a voice to share their bullying story. There are over 80 excerpts from adolescents that are willing to share how and why they were being bullied, and what they did to overcome it. This article also teaches teens all different types of bullying that occurs, and how or what you can do to prevent it from effecting you. Essays, poetry, open letters, photography, and drawing are used in this book, mostly representing the individual stories of the people who experienced it themselves.
This book does have some basis, because against bullying, and the stories of the teens stand towards anti-bullying and that people should not be put down for being themselves. The intended audience in the article are teens, and they get to connect with the other adolescents that wrote their story. Although there may be some bias, the point that bullying should not happen and people should not be put down for being themselves is portrayed very well in this story.
I might be wrong but i think that maybe you should not list the types of stories in the book and maybe categorize it into one category
DeleteYes Claire is right, try not to list in the summary. Also try not to use "you" like when you said "prevent it from effecting you" maybe make it general and say prevent from effecting people or others.
Deletemaybe instead of saying so much about the specific parts that are biased just say that it is biased and instead list some special points of interest, and strengths of the article
DeleteI would shorten it a little
DeleteSome parts are a bit listy and there were a couple of run-ons but other than that great job!
Deleteit is a little listy
DeleteI would try to add in the causes and effects throughout the article.
DeleteFinn had a good point and the summary and annotation in about 180 words. try to cut it down. Maybe get ride of some examples of bias
DeleteThe summery is good but some detailed would make t shorter
DeleteTry not to use words such as "you". Try not to make the analysis as listly like the first sentence. Good job
Deletetry not to use words like you, and seems just a little bit listy, otherwise, good work.
DeleteWest, Emily. "Bullying, Gossip, Lack of Respect Often Causes of Teen Suicide." Aberdeen American News. N.p., 06 Jan. 2011. Web. 23 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteSuicide rates among students at high schools and universities are rapidly increasing and it is mostly due to gossiping and bullying. Social media websites are a big source that are connected to a lot of the suicide killings. This happens because it gives one the chance to confront another person without having to see the person physically so basically anybody can bully over the internet no matter how strong or weak you are in reality. But bullying is not the only reason for so many suicides sometimes teens are in a dark place and think they have had enough and take their own life. whether it is on the playground, at school or even, over social media bullying happens everywhere at every age. The article is a gathering of different quotes from police and the principle from a teens school. The teen they are talking about committed suicide and they believe it had to do with bullying that took place on social media.
Make sure you try not to list the places
DeleteDon't forger to capitalize at the beginning of a sentence. Also I think you need to add/add more to your analysis.
Deleteto your analysis you can still add the intended audience, distictive features, and all the other things
DeleteDon't say "so basically" it makes it sound informal.
DeleteI agree with Claire. But also try to make the cause and effect flow a little bit more. Great job Welly!
Deletedoes this article mention anything about how suicides relate to gossip or is it just suicides due to bullying?
DeleteTry to use less colloquialism. In your summary, you said, ¨so basically¨ and ¨a lot.¨
Delete"The teen they are talking" clarify who "they" is
DeleteAdding to dayna's comment.
DeleteBullying is not a form of gossip as gossip is behind a person's back but bullying is in the victam's face.
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"so basically" makes you sound like you didn't want to write the article
Deletetry to review youre wording.
DeleteDo not use words like "you" try to replace those words with "teens" or "people".
Deleteyeah, do not use "you" and seems a bit listy.
DeleteYee, Vivian. "On Staten Island, Relentless Bullying Is Blamed for a Teenage Girl’s Suicide." The New York Times. The New York Times, 25 Oct. 2012. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteIn this article they talk about how Felicia Garcia committed suicide do to gossip from the football team. Felicia threw herself in front of a train to get it over with because the football team had been spreading gossip about her that was not true.The police were investigating her death for a long time. But in the end police officers were not positive that anyone would get in trouble for what happened. Many people were hurt by the fact that she killed herself, so the article also makes people realise that its not only yourself that gets hurt if you try to kill yourself it is also the people around you and who care about you.
This article is a good article if you are wanting to read about someone who took her own life because of gossip and because of bullying. This article has no bias and it speaks the truth about what happened. It has really good quality of word choice and it goes through a lot of things that happen so you get the gist of everything.
maybe in the first sentence, you should say "the author" instead of "they"
DeleteI agree with Katarzyna, Be more specific but not too specific. Also maybe explain who the intended audience is.
DeleteI would have more broad topics and shorten it a little.
Deletemaybe use 'caused to' or 'lead to' instead of just 'because' but great job I really like it!
Deleteat the end it started turning into a moral of a story try to focus on just summarizing the article
DeleteAt the end of your summary, there was a comma-splice. You also used ¨But¨ in the beginning of your sentence. I would try to combine those sentences.
DeleteIn the beginning of the second paragraph, try to use another word instead of "good"
DeleteYoure writing hee is not formal. Fix it by taking out things like "to get it over with" and "threw herself". Make sure to stay to the author's views rather than any of your own.
DeleteTry to condense this if possible.
DeleteTry to edit your wording and sentences.
DeleteTry not to use the word "you" and also the two first sentences in your analysis started with "This artical is..."
DeleteYeah, I agree with Isaac, also try a bit of editing on sentence structure, other wise good job
DeleteGossip and Reputations
ReplyDeleteLezard, Nicholas. "It’S One Thing To Have A Reputation, But Quite Another To Have One That Is So Undeserved." New Statesman 143.5231 (2014): 88-89. Literary Reference Center. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
In this article the author is explaining how gossip has become a prominent source of entertainment, how it can affect your social status, and how it negatively impact individuals reputations. The author explains how on multiple occasions people close to him had utilized gossip in a hurtful way to create false accusations about his personal life. For example, the authors friends had created the rumor that he drinks too much even though the author stated that he does not. This is hurtful to him because it questions his good reputation that he has worked hard on. The author depicts how his friends immediately categorized him as a bad influence because of second hand information that gossip had manipulated.
This article is better for the more advanced reader but anyone should be able to manage without much trouble. Some strengths and weaknesses that the reader can observe are that the article is a great example of how gossip can ruin a persons reputation but the article at times can be a bit hard to follow.
In the begging you are listing the things that this article talks about so make sure you are careful about that.
DeleteMaybe explain what the author is trying to get past to you, Not just what happened to him, but maybe what he is trying to tell you to do about it.
Deleteyou need an apostrophe in "individuals' reputations". and I agree with Claire that you listed items in the beginning
DeleteBe more broad and shorten it.
DeleteInstead of repeating 'the author' you could say Nicholas Lezard. Nice use of vocabulary, great job!
DeleteTry not to use him or his so much it gets a little repetitive
DeleteLike everyone else said, try to change up your sentences so you are not saying ¨the author¨ as much.
DeleteYou should shorten it and maybe not use the example
Delete175 words... make sure to shorten before it is turned in. Make sure to condense and only get the main points.
Deletemight want to condense the writing a little bit
DeleteTry not to use words such as "your". Overall good job, and stay away from saying " the author", like Finn said.
DeleteTry not to use "the author", and try to shorten.
DeleteNickolai Diepholz
ReplyDeleteFackler, Maria Francesca. "“I'll Google It”: Gossip, Queer Intimacies, and the Internet1." Modern Drama 53.3 (2010): 390-409. Web.
Some ways are for gossip and how it relates to the internet and social media are that It is spread around the internet and thats a form of gossip. Some celebrities have articles on the internet and if they're divorced and pregnant and some stuff like that. For example from the journal article gossip it is about how gossip spreads around the internet and the girl karam tells how the new technology shows how gossip and how information spreads around the internet very fast and it gets changed and people make stuff up along the way. She also states that the chain of all the different technology spreads all the way and changes through phones to computers to tablets. Gossip is spread and taught through the way people tell and think and change things through their mind and people change things through how they think. Pretty much information that is changed over time and flipped from its original way is gossip. The way it is shared is through social midia like facebook and other things like that.
Make sure you are not listening what kind of things are on line for celebrities. And also saying some stuff like that is kinda informal make sure you stay in formal voice.
DeleteTry not to say things like "pretty much" it begins to sound biased. Also you need to add an analysis.
Deleteyou spelled "media" wrong. and you should use a more formal tone too
DeleteTry not to write like you are talking to a friend.
DeleteI agree with the comments above, try to make it more formal. Also you have some grammar mistakes. But nice job!
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Deletethis has a lot of awkward phrasing be sure to read it out loud
DeleteI don't really understand your first sentence. Also, try to make the annotation more formal.
Deletetry to keep it formal ... maybe not say "some stuff"
DeleteMake sure to add an annotation. Summary I understood but make sure to add things like bias and strenghts of the article
DeleteIts a bit choppy
DeleteI think that this is exalent and i would change the formal formatting but its good I think.
DeleteTry not to say things such as "stuff like that". It makes it less formal and choppy.
Deletedo not list, try to be formal, and check some spelling.
DeleteDevonte Patriquin
ReplyDeleteLevin, Dan. "Weaning Teenagers Off Gossip, for One Hour at a Time."Weaning Teenagers Off Gossip, for One Hour at a Time (2008): n. pag. Web.
This article seems to piece together the fact that gossip can affect teenagers and the older group in new ways. The interesting piece of this is the fact that people never realize the larger effect on people. However, as it travels, gossip becomes contorted and the truth becomes lies or worse. In the end, gossip usually ends up hurting someone or multiple people in one fell swoop. Gossip itself takes multiple effects, and this pieces them together well. As they all seem to connect back to one source. The article also discusses what people are doing to fight against gossip, such as forming large groups and working together. Also, a large factor is how people are taking it. Many of them are working together and realizing what gossip does. But, that doesn't change the fact that gossip may always exist, no matter how far it goes against someones wishes.
Wiley, John. "Is Gossip Power? The Inverse Relationship Between Gossip, Power And, Likabality." Ebsco. N.p., 1
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Gossip can affect how much power people have in social groups, How liked they are and how trustworthy they are. People who gossip about someone else negatively share a stronger a social bond. People who gossip more frequently have higher social status than with people who dont gossip as often. People who gossip negatively about other people are deemed untrustworthy. People gossip with in a group to enhance their self esteem. Negative gossipers are likes less than positive gossipers. Some distinctive features about this article is that it is a more challenging read that requires most readers to closely read it. This article is not a short or lengthy article. The intended audience are scholars and researchers. Some strengths about this article is that it goes in depth into every cause and effect they have. Some weaknesses of this article are that it has areas with data and abbreviated tests that make you stop and reread it. There was no bias.